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HannahAllan
Q: Hi There x This is my very first draft of my personal statement. was wondering if you could help me with structure, content, punctuation etc. I have chosen to study courses which incorporate Information Management, politics, accounts and languages with Business Studies. I am enjoying my business related college course it has gave me a great insight into further education and has pushed me to want to further my education at university. I feel being at college as opposed to school has helped me mature a great deal as i am often in the company of mature students and i am treated as an adult. I feel i am ready to make the move from home to Edinburgh. I have an interest in Economics because it encompasses a wide set of issues which have a major influence on daily life. I am a good decision maker and as the subject is based on decision making i have always found it interesting since standard grade. From an early age i have had an interest in IT. Recently my friends and i set up a website where we keep diaries and have photo galleries which we frequently update. This has added to my already excellent IT skills. I am competent in a wide range of IT activities, programming, internet research, word processing, spreadsheets and all of microsoft office packages. I also have some knowledge of an accounts package called SAGE. I have always found the study of languages compelling. sorry it is not completed. i will log on tomoroow and complete.
Answer: Thank you for sending me part of your draft; the rest has not yet arrived. It would be best if you attached the full version as a file, having read and acted upon the following advice:

Your course choices worry me. The range covered is too wide. If you are applying to more competitive universities you may be at a disadvantage since, although each does not see the others to which you have applied, it is difficult to write a PS encompassing so many possible options. I really think you need to decide what you really want to do - there is a world of difference, for example, between courses in Politics and those in Languages with Business Studies.

Whatever you go for, you need to be much more SPECIFIC in your PS. It's not just a question of correcting punctuation, etc! So you need to make reference to particular topic areas in Economics or Business Studies or Politics, and state what you have found or would find fascinating about them, and why you want to know more about them.

What, for example, do you study on your 'business related college course'? What in Economics 'encompasses a wide range of issues'? - what exactly are some of these issues?

The website/IT section is pretty good. It talks about skills!

You can't make a specific reference to Edinburgh in the PS, since presumably you are applying to other universities as well. I'd cut out all the stuff about being treated as an adult too, and talk instead about developing independence and effective patterns of work and organisation.

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