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Psychology Personal Statement

This is much better! You have answered most of the questions I posed last time, and as a result the academic content is greatly improved. I have re-worded most of it to make it read even better, and I hope you like the finished product. Good luck!

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Psychology Personal Statement

I am afraid that, as it stands, this is badly unbalanced, as it contains far too little about your SPECIFIC academic interests in Psychology and fat too much on extra-curricular activities, some of which (shopping and babysitting, for example) will not be of interest to academic selectors!

I have therefore removed all the unnecessary material and repetition in a significant pruning exercise. There has been a fair amount of rewording in the process, while I have made the concluding paragraph more convincing. This then leaves plenty of room for you to introduce academic material - in the places I have indicated in your draft, and to include a whole new paragraph. You need to identify topics in psychology and biology that particularly interest you, and to find links between the subjects, wherever possible. You need to be much more specific about your reading, and to indicate what new discoveries you have made. And you need to be much clearer about the nature of your project work. Once you have done this, the final product should be much, much better.

I hope this helps. Good luck with your application.

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Personal Statement for Psychology

Much of this is very commendable - your commitment comes across strongly. The section on MV is particularly impressive.

It is, however, all rather long, and sometimes repetitive, especially with the various references to skills development. I have eliminated all the repetition, and changed some of the wording too, so that it is now more focused and lively. The conclusion (some reordering) is now more convincing too.

This leaves room for an essential addition at the end of the second paragraph - you MUST quote specific examples of the skills you identify in your A level subjects that will prepare you for a Psychology course. It is also worth mentioning in the first paragraph the nature of your illness/setback that you have successfully overcome.

I hope you like the revised version. Good luck with your application.

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My Psychology Personal Statement

I have gone in for some quite radical surgert here. The balance is too heavily tilted towards extra-curricular activities, with too little being said about your specific interests in Psychology. To this end, I have shortened (and occasionally removed) the extra-curricular material in order to make space for a new second paragraph where you must outline some specific interests in psycholoy (do you study it at A level, for example?) - I have indicated on the draft exactly what sort of things you should consider including. I have also combined several of your very short paragraphs wherever there was a comon theme involved.

I hope you like the new version; good luck with your application.

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Psychology Personal Statement

There is a lot of good material here, and the paragraph describing your memory research arising out of Miller is particularly effective. The problem, however, is that the statement is far too long, and would simply not fit into the available space! I have therefore gone in for a lot of rewriting and excision, without changing the content or sense of what you want to convey. It also now has a much sharper opening and a decisive concluding sentence.

I hope you like the attached revised version. Good luck with your application!
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Psychology Personal Statement

This is well thought out and constructed. Often, however, you tend to emply the same word repeatedly, and so I have made a good number of changes to the text, without altering the sense of what you are trying to say. Your enthusiasm comes across strongly, which is always the key thing.

I hope you like the revised draft - good luck with your application!
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UCAS Personal Statement applying for BSc Psychology

You have put together some interesting material in places here, and I have sharpened up the language in order to make it all flow more smoothly. There is, however, more work to do, and I have ensured that you have the space to do it. There is not really enough reference to Psychology, and you can deal with this in your second paragraph by being much more specific about your observations. At present, you simply refer to 'certain things', which is far too vague. Later on, you mention an access course - give details of the subject area. I note also that you make no reference anywhere to subjects studied at school or college - if any of these had a link with psychology, it would be a good idea to introduce this into the PS. Once you have done this, it will all read rather well. I hope this is helpful. Good luck!
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Psychology Personal Statement

There is some decent material here, particularly in the latter stages on your skills and interests. I have changed the order round quite considerably in both first and second paragraphs, so that it reads more fluently, and I have also eliminated the odd exercise in rather clumsy expression. I have added an absolutely critical final sentence. I hope you like the revised version. Good luck with your application!
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Psychology Personal Statement

I had seen the earlier draft, and this one faithfully reproduces most of my earlier alterations. I have now added a more striking opening sentence, and have made a number of smallish changes elsewhere, particularly in the new sentences you have added about ICT skills. It now reads very nicely; good luck with your application!
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Psychology Personal Statement

As it stands it is too short, and lacking specific detail. I have completely rewritten the draft, and have indicated where you need to add in a completely new 3rd paragraph, outlining your favourite topic areas in the Psychology you have already studied. I hope you like the new version.
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