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UCAS Personal Statement Example

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hey...i just done my rough draft of my personal statement but im not too keen on it..im not sure whether i am waffling on some parts or i have not entere enough details, also its about 340 words is this enough or do i need to add more things in...please help....!!!!!!

I have made quite a number of textual changes here, removing in particular all the clumsier expressions. The length is a little short, but this will be rectified when you add the specific examples requested in two places in the heavily reworded second paragraph. I hope you agree it now reads much better!
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1st Ucas Personal Statement Draft

This is a very good first draft. It is well written and your enthusiasm comes through loud and clear but also quite naturally. You have a lot to write about as you have been involved in a variety of projects. You also demonstrate a good range of extra-curricular interests which show you to be a balanced, well-rounded individua...
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help mature with personal statement

This reads very well, and I have made a limited number of changes to the wording in order to make a number of sentences flow rather better. I have inserted the fact that you are a mature student early on. It is best to leave a line between each separate paragraph, as have done. And I have sorted out all your space problems, putting the sp...
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This is a good personal statement. You include a range of appropriate details and write clearly and fluently. However, check for minor errors such as those below. Notes 1. I wish to study biology [give subjects a capital letter – Biology] 2. with evidence, the [semi-colon rather than a comma needed here] 3. gained at Universi...
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Q: I want to apply for business management and international relations both at leeds, how do i include both intrerests in my personal statement without contradicting myself. Jennifer
Answer: In truth this is a very risky strategy at such a high profile university. In principle, applications are 'blind' - in other words, a university doesn't know where else you are applying. The problem here is that both courses are at the same university, and so it is highly likely that the admissions officers will note the double application, even though it involves different departments. I would certainly send a letter to both departments in advance of the form being completed, stressing your dedication to Leeds. I don't know your AS results - these are both very competitive courses - but would strongly advise that you use all your other four university options - and preferably selecting only one of the two subjects in each case.

If you insist on going ahead with this then your PS must stress transferable skills. Are you studying one or both of Business Studies and Government & politics for A level? If so, focus upon not only that part of the subject content that particularly interests you, but also upon techniques. Among these you could refer to the common themes of decision-making in an uncertain world, interpretation and analysis of evidence, the importance of risk and of constraints, financial constraints on decision making, conflicting objectives, reaction to change (especially where it is unexpected) and pre-emptive strategies. Cite lots of examples from both subjects. A nice line to add is that foreign policy is often dictated by business interests and lobbying.

I hope this is helpful. I'll happily look over your first draft.

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