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This is potentially very good, and I enjoyed reading it. So will an admissions tutor. The academic content is impressive, as is the description of a wide range of interests and activities. I have made quite a number of textual amendments, all designed to improve the logic of the flow. They include the addition of a semi-jocular line about Machiavelli and a more rounded (and thus convincing) conclusion. Elsewhere lots of words and phrases have been changed. My only fear is that it may be a little long, though not by much - you may have to excise the sentences about debates, and some of the references to your reading. But very well done, and I hope your application meets with the success it deserves. There will not be many members of the SWP making university applications!