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I have needed to make wholesale changes here in order that it reads coherently, and hence a great deal more convincingly.
The other problem, which you must now address, is that it is rather short. This is because at no stage have you said anything specific about your advbertising interests - such as which ads you have analysed, what your film was about, etc. At several points, therefore, I have indicated in italics or question marks where some specific references are needed. This also includes an indication of which branch or branches of advertising you are particularly interested in. If you are computer-literate, then some statement about your computer-aided design skills might also be useful.
I hope all this helps. Good luck with your application.