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In a well-developed personal statement, describe your achievements in your chosen field of study and your future career plans and goals.

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I have made a number of further changes, all with a view to making this read more fluently. I have completely rewritten your short paragraph on 'weaknesses'. I am still, however, a little concerned that you are not really saying anything very specific about your academic interests/achievements in HRM - for example, when you talk about using the funds to buy books, you could and should go on to identify two or three such volumes, which in turn would then enable you to discuss briefly some of your specialist interests. Similarly, you could highlight aspects of the course that have fired your imagination.

I hope this is helpful.

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