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Your enthusiasm certainly comes across, though it is odd that the draft contains no reference to any of the 'wider reading' in the law that you mention in the first paragraph.

Overall, the draft was too long, and so I have pruned it, eliminating any superfluous phrases, and the occasional sentence. In off places it sounded rather smug as well, and so you will find that I have altered some of the language used.

I hope you like the revised draft, and good luck with your application. I assume that you are applying to some of the lower grade universities, since all of those that ask for AAA or AAB had an advisory closing date of 15th October.

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carolinewoods
carolinewoods

"rather smug" is the understatement of the century!

responded Sep 15, 2010 5:19:04 PM BST
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