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UCAS Experts Feedback:
This is too short, and too vague. I have amended a good deal of the wording. I have also indicated the places where you need to fill in more specific detail (topics, interests, insights, etc) and have made some suggestions about what you might be able to mention in the business/finance/accounting area - this all appears in bold on your draft.
I hope you like the new version; I am happy to see another draft when you have completed the designated tasks.