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I have rewritten most of this in order to make it read more convincingly. You now have further work to do, since the computing content is at present too light. Where I have indicated in the draft you need to provide specific details of your various web designs, and you should also say something about your expertise in various computer applications. You also give no indication of whether you have already done some work on computer games.
I have deleted the sentence about working for Asda while at university since this is the last thing that university selectors would approve of - they expect you to be fully focused on your studies!
I hope you like the revised version. Good luck with your application.