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Teacher Training first draft personal Statement

Uploaded by becca_boop | Oct 6, 2004 | UCAS Personal Statements
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becca_boop asks:

sorry I forgot to include the statement! Here is a copy below :

‘Teaching is the profession that teaches all other professions’, this quote confirms how important teachers are. Becoming a teacher has always been an ambition of mine. The concept of passing on knowledge to children who will use the skills they have learnt for the rest of their lives, seems to be a truly rewarding career. The course I am applying for is Teacher Training alongside of English Language. English Language is a subject which I have been studying for two years now at both As and A2 level., and is a subject which I would like to continue studying at university. Language is a device which everybody uses worldwide and I believe that it is truly fascinating to learn of how context affects language and the way it is used. As this topic is of interest to me I have decided to investigate how persuasive language is used in advertising on the television and on the radio. I have particularly enjoyed learning about the varying linguistic techniques used by both genders, and the topic of child language acquisition, which I am currently learning about is highly captivating . It is incredible to think that a child of two years of age can learn a vocabulary of up to seventy words per week and are able to begin to form basic two and three word sentences using these words. I feel that as I am learning about how a child’s vocabulary develops, it will be of use to me when I am training to become a teacher. As I will already have an understanding of how the child’s brain is working to form sentences and to help the child communicate, I feel it will be of benefit me in the classroom, as unlike some people I will know not condemn the child for failure to pronounce words correctly, as I know that this is something which the child will learn in there own time.
   During my spare time I have taken it upon myself to gain some experience in the classroom at a local primary school. Previous to this I have had experience with children by completing a work placement in a private nursery. Each of these opportunities have confirmed that teaching is the profession in which I would love to belong to. The placements have also allowed me to gain essential experience with children of all age ranges and has allowed me to communicate and interact with them. Again I feel this is an advantage on my behalf as I should be aware of how to handle various situations, however, these skills can be further develop on the course. As well as this I have also been lucky enough to have family friends who are members of the teaching profession and teachers from my previous schools, on hand to give me advice when necessary. Alongside of this I had the chance to speak to a head teacher of a local primary school, when my college hosted its annual Industry Day conference earlier in the year. All of whom answered any questions or concerns which I had about taking this career path.
   At college I am studying three A levels: English Language, English Literature and Sociology, I also have an AS in History. Each of these subjects have taught me skills which will help my with future work. For example I have learnt to look at a variety of everyday objects and situations, with even more consideration to everyone’s view point than I previously did. Due to a number of presentations that I have had to present to my classes, either alone or with a group, I have learnt to become more self-confident and assertive . The subjects have allowed me to work with an assortment of people who I may not have previously had the chance to work with, and I am grateful for this as it has allowed my to gain other’s viewpoints and to make new friends. The courses have been able to teach me to work independently and to research numerous texts I normally would not have looked at, however all of which have been very interesting to read. At high school I was made a prefect and my duties were to supervise the tuck shop and I was also a member of the prom committee. Both of these experiences have helped me with my organisational skills and has allowed me to be able to work with others, as part of a team.
   Outside of college I enjoy reading, my favourite books are ‘I Know Why the Caged Bird Sings’ by Maya Angelou, ‘To Kill a Mockingbird’ by Harper Lee and I also like to read more mainstream authors such as Marianne Keyes and Louise Bagshaw. I particularly enjoy taking part in aerobics when I have the time, as it allows me to take my mind of studying for a few hours and I have met a number of people there who also have similar interests to my own. At the weekend I am employed by Leigh Golf Club as a cleaner. This job has taught me to become more independent and I make sure that I am very thorough in all aspects of my work and make sure that I give 100%, as I do with all aspects of my life. The job has enabled me to work as part of a team and has allowed me to experience an enjoyable working atmosphere. In my spare time and as often as possible I enjoy writing poetry and have had poems published in a local poetry book for selected students from localised areas and I have had an article published in the local newspaper.
   I am a committed, determined, conscientious student, who applies myself to every set task with enthusiasm and I always make sure that I give 110% in all that I do, ensuring that everything is done to the best standards as possible. I hope to carry on giving my all and I am extremely excited about all the career possibilities and other aspects which the university has to offer.

etutor answers:
As it stands, it was far too long; also too much repetition and clumsy expression. I have exhaustively revised it, though it is probably still too long - you may not recognise it, but it is now so much better! I have also given it a paragraph structure, as you will see below:

‘Teaching is the profession that teaches all other professions’, a quotation that underlines how important teachers are. Becoming a teacher has always been my ambition. The opportunity to pass on knowledge to children, who will use the skills they have learnt for the rest of their lives, will be a truly rewarding vocation. I am applying for a Teacher Training course, together with English Language. I have studied English for two years, both at AS and A2 level, and want to continue with it at university.

Linguistic use is universal, and I have found it fascinating to discover how the cultural context affects language and the ways in which it is employed. I have recently decided to investigate how persuasive language is used in advertising on the television and on the radio. I have particularly enjoyed learning about the differing linguistic techniques used by both genders, while the acquisition of language by children has captivated my imagination. It is incredible to think that a child of two can learn a vocabulary of up to seventy words per week, and can then begin to form basic two and three word sentences. As my understanding of the acquisition of vocabulary develops, I shall have a greater insight into how children communicate. This will benefit me in the classroom, as I will know not to condemn a child for failure to correctly pronounce words, since this is something which children will learn in their own time.

During my spare time I have taken it upon myself to gain some experience in the classroom at a local primary school, following an earlier work placement in a private nursery. Each of these opportunities has confirmed that teaching is the profession to which I would love to belong. The placements have also provided me with essential experience with children of all age ranges, and have allowed me to communicate and interact with them. These preliminary teaching encounters have introduced me to the importance of classroom management and of motivating children, skills that can be developed further on the degree course. I am lucky enough to have on hand family friends who are members of the teaching profession as well as teachers from my previous schools, to offer advice when necessary. I have also spoken at length with the head teacher of a local primary school, who was able to answer any questions about taking this career path.

At college I am studying A levels in English Language, English Literature and Sociology. I also have an AS in History. Each of these subjects has taught me transferable skills. For example, I have become more appreciative of the views of others when discussing a variety of issues. I have made presentations to my classes, either alone or in a group, which have helped me to become more self-confident. My subjects have allowed me to work with people from different backgrounds, which has resulted in exposure to new ideas and the making of new friends. The courses have taught me to work independently, especially in reading and in conducting research. At high school I was made a prefect, responsible for supervision of the tuck shop; I was also a member of the prom committee. Both activities have improved my organisational skills and my capacity to work harmoniously with others, as part of a team.

Outside college I enjoy reading. My favourite authors are Maya Angelou, Harper Lee, Marianne Keyes and Louise Bagshaw. I particularly enjoy taking part in aerobics, as it allows me to take my mind off studying for a few hours, while I have met a number of people there who share my interests. At the weekend I work for Leigh Golf Club as a cleaner. This has taught me to become more independent and to be very thorough in all aspects of my work. I give 100%, as I do in all aspects of my life. As often as possible I write poetry and have had poems published in a local poetry book and an article published in the local newspaper.

I am a committed and conscientious student, applying myself to every task with enthusiasm and ensuring that everything is done to the best possible standards. I am confident that I have the academic ability and personal qualities to make a success of a degree course, and eventually to enter the teaching profession.

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